Potrzebne POPRAWIENIE napisanego tekstu - opis!!! - Tłumaczenia

proszę pomóżcie jestem początkujący a trafiłem do zaawansowanej klasy i mam problemy z angielskim :cry: :cry: :cry:
miałem opisać po angielsku przedstawicieli grupy "new romantics" i OPISAŁEM teraz mam nadzieję że znajdzie się ktoś - zlituje i mi to sprawdzi:!: :!: :!: :!:

Representatives group New Romantics are very interesting and untypical people. Woman has on oneself a black and white dress with long sleeved, and white belt. She has big, white collar and make-up. She has a pink lips, blusher on cheeks, eyeliner, blue eye shadow, and foundation. Woman has a orange hair, black hat on the head, rings and earring. Man has onself a orange, velvet, shirt with black cuffs and white, lace collar. He has a make-up. Man has a pink lips, eyeliner, white eye shadow, and foundation. He has a brown hair, rings, signet ring and stud. Generally people who belonging group New Romantics have a very colours clothes, big collers. They have very intense make-up, orginal clothes and orginal hairstyle. They have a jewellery: rings, earrings, weddind ring, signet ring.
Representatives group New Romantics like a electronic music. That is a
"light" and pleasant music with romantically standardized texts. They music is opposite music punks.
In the free times people listen to music, for writing new songs, and writing poems. They interesting fashion, design new, colours clothes.

[ Dodano: Wto Paź 09, 2007 12:54 ]
wiem że napisałem tu pewnie masę głupoty ale pisałem sam i teraz PROSZĘ o poprawę tego tekstu :!:

Representatives of the New Romantic group are very interesting and untypical people. Women usually wear a black and white dresses with long sleeves, and white belts. They have a big, white collars and make-up - pink lipsticks, blushers on their cheeks, eyeliners, blue eye shadows, and foundations. Also, orange hair, black hats on the head, rings and earrings, are noticeable . On the other hand, Men wears orange, velvet, shirts with black cuffs and white, lace collars. They also have an make-up - pink lipsticks, eyeliners, white eye shadows, and foundations. Rings, signet rings and studs are very popular too. Generally people who belongs to the New Romantic stream wear a very colourful clothes and big collars. They have very intensive make-up, orginal clothes and orginal hairstyle. They have a lot of jewellery: rings, earrings, wedding rings and signet rings.
Representatives of the New Romantic like electronic music. That is a
"light" and pleasant music with romantic texts. Their music is an opposition to a punk music.
In the free time people are listening the music, writing new songs and poems. They are interested in fashion and designing new, colourful clothes.

Myśle że teraz jest ok, choć mogłem gdzieś coś pominąć (w końcu tekst długi) a i ja sam nauczyłem sie paru słówek.

trafiłem do zaawansowanej klasy

Tylko sie cieszyć i korzystać ;) tzw. intensywny kurs języka ang. Nie zmarnuj szansy!

Pozdrawiam. 8)

Representatives of the New Romantic group are very interesting and untypical people. Women usually wear a black and white dresses with long sleeves and white belts. They have big, white collars and make-up - pink lipsticks, blushers on their cheeks, eyeliners, blue eye shadows and foundations. Also, orange hair, black hats, original rings and earrings are noticeable. On the other hand, men wear orange velvet shirts with black cuffs and white, lace collars. They also do their make-up using pink lipsticks, eyeliners, white eye shadows and foundations. Rings, signet rings and studs are very popular, too. Generally, people who belong to the New Romantic stream wear very colourful clothes and big collars. They have very intensive make-up, orginal clothes and orginal hairstyle. They have a lot of jewellery: rings, earrings, wedding rings and signet rings.
Representatives of New Romantic like electronic music. That is a
"light" and pleasant music with romantic texts. Their music is an opposition to a punk music.
In their free time, those people listen the music, write new songs and poems. They are interested in fashion and designing new, colourful clothes.

to by było wszystko, aczkolwiek pierwsze słyszę o tego typu wyglądzie jako New Romantic. A czasem kolory sie nie pomyliły? Moje zastrzeżenia co do treści jako takiej:
1. kiecki z długimi rękawami - a z krótkimi to już nie?? czy to są jakieś specjalne stroje, jeśli mają długie rękawy? Skupiłabym się raczej na materiale, bufach, technice wykonania, może fasonie, ale - rękawy?
2. podkład to nosi każda kobieta, która chce wyrównać koloryt skóry X) dodaj coś, co go wyróżnia; jeśli nic - to po co o nim wspominasz?
3.pomarańczowe włosy??
4. a gdzie niby mają nosić kapelusze, na nogach? :)
5.dziwki też mają intensywny make-up, a niekoniecznie są New Romantic
6. co do biżuterii, zaznacz jakoś, że się czymś wyróżnia, skoro to dla nich charakterystyczne
7.to w sumie by było na tyle, gratuluję dostania się do zaawansowanej grupy...